Hi!
Although not everyone has responded to last week's question, the responses I have read so far were both interesting and insightful. Keep up the good work!
This week's question is one of the more unique questions that has been posted to a W&G 5 blog. Read it carefully and think about your response for a while before starting to write. Here it is:
If you were born human again, which sex (male or female) would you like to be? Why?
I look forward to reading your responses!
Happy writing!
Josh
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ReplyDeleteIf I was born the human again, I would like to be a man. Because, I am a woman now, so I have experienced for woman life. I like living as women. For example, I think women can enjoy their fashions more than men, and in U.S., most men are lady first. When I carried heavy stuff, sometime some men said me “Do you need help?”, and carried my stuff! Moreover, women can get pregnant, but men can’t! There are a lot of advantages for women.
ReplyDeleteHowever, men also have their sexual advantages. Generally speaking, men are physically strong, and have more improved muscles than women. If I was a man, I might be able to enjoy sports more and more. For instant, in foot ball games (actually, it is not popular in Japan), men tackle bitterly each other. It may be hard for women. In another point, women’s rights have changed today, however male chauvinism has continued yet. Especially, in job hunting, men are easy to get job and work more than women. Some people think that only woman should care for their children and don’t need to work. Actually, a lot of women retire because of pregnancy. Many companies think when a woman gets pregnant, she might retire the job, so they should employ a man. Still, women are weak socially.
Therefore, I would be a man in next world. There are other reasons why I think so. I want to enjoy boys fashion. In addition, I am a woman now, so I can understand women’s feeling; therefore, if I was a man in next world, I can be a super nice guy for women! haha Any way, thank everyone for reading my comment and thinking my question!
You make some really interesting comments. There's no doubt that being a man might offer some advantages when it comes to getting/keeping a job. This is unfortunate given that many qualified women are at a disadvantage just because they are women. There are a few women who try to play football or other "men's" sports here in the U.S., but you're right when you say that it might be a little difficult for women to do this since men's and women's bodies are different. Do you think getting pregnant is an advantage for women?
DeleteOn grammar:
This isn't exactly a specific grammar structure but rather a different (accurate) way to phrase your idea. A better way to say "men are easy to get a job and work...," would be to say "Men can get a job more easily" OR "It is easier for men to get a job."
Hope this helps.
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ReplyDeleteIf I born as human again i would like to be man. Because I think men have an easier life than women. For example, the woman have to take care of her beauty before she got married and after she get married she have to find job to help her husband. Also, she have to take care from her children and teach them until they grow up. She must clean the house, cook, and wash clothing. She have to be fashionable and take care of her health. However, man just have to go to the work and he have to sped money for his family. So, men have comfortable life.
I enjoyed reading your perspective on this topic. You're not far off (which means you're right) when you point out that women often have two jobs while men only have one. That is, women often have to work AND take care of the home/children. This is changing in some places, but even so, women still often end up doing more.
DeleteOn grammar:
One easy and simple way to make your grammar more accurate would be to check your subject-verb agreement when using 3rd person subjects.
For example: "She have to go....." (incorrect)
Correction: "She HAS to go..."
This isn't the most important grammar error since meaning doesn't change when subject-verb agreement doesn't match, but it is an error that you can easily correct if you go back and check each subject-verb to make sure they agree.
Hope this helps.
I can’t mention which one because I have never considered about this question, and I don’t have a strong feeling of attachment of life. First of all, I’m thinking about it now, but I can’t still choose clearly. If anything, I’ve already experienced a woman life, so if I were born human again, I would be a man a little better at these two choices. When I think casually, I would be a cool and smart man from now at least if I were a man. However I believe both women and men have advantages and disadvantages such as social position, sexual discrimination and stereotype for each gender. Therefore, I can’t still choose which one; in addition, I don’t care which sex in the afterlife.
ReplyDeleteInteresting response. The word I would use to describe your perspective on this topic is "ambivalent." That is, you could go either way but have no strong desire to choose one or the other. However, it seems like you are leaning towards trying out life as a man since this would be a new experience.
DeleteOn grammar:
Here's a comment on a grammar point that we will look at next week. In your final sentence, you say, "I don't care which sex in the afterlife." This is almost right, but one thing is missing: the verb. This is a wh-noun clause, and since it's a clause, it needs a subject and a verb.
Correction: "I don't care which sex I am in the afterlife."
Hope this helps.
To be honest, I don't want even think about being women if I was born again. Even if there will be choice for me like "if you were born hundred time again, which gender will you choice". Of course the answer will be man. If being woman were cool Fumika, Aida, and Kate choose to be woman again, but they choose to be a man, so we all know that being woman you have a lot of responsibilities, seating at home, watching for children, excuse me but to be pregnant, Huuuu Nooo. For these reasons I want to be a man. Also, men are stronger than women. Men can do want they want but women can't. In our country, men can go to all type of wrestling but women can't. I am a wrestler, and I like to wrestle everywhere and every time but if I was woman I couldn't do this. Furthermore lets see another bright example from Islam and we can understand easily why being woman is hard and I don't want to be a woman if I was born again.
ReplyDelete■Why is it that Islam does not task woman with the same duties of man as it is in the West?
●When a woman take on the same responsibility of a man; she will definitely be obliged to drift away from their motherhood because she would, then, be expected to work extremely hard in order to allow this responsibility to flourish, to be worthwhile and to give it the chance for expansion. All of that hard work would be simultaneously accompanied by the heavy burdens of motherhood; and that will have a great effect on her role as a mother, on the family and on the society as well. Since the fatherhood of the male does not lie in his physical structure as a man unlike the woman whose motherhood is based on her body as a female; this simple fact makes it a lot easier for a man to be a father than a woman to be a mother. And it is natural that motherhood, although it does not cancel all the abilities of a woman, burdens the mother heavily both physically and emotionally even in the early stages of pregnancy; and it is also natural that it will exhaust her at least in ways that won’t ever exist outside the framework of motherhood(http://english.bayynat.org.lb/womenfamily/the%20balance.htm).
You make a clear argument in favor of being a man if you were born again. Interesting observation that three of your four female classmates also said they would choose to be a man. One thing I don't understand in your comment is your question about Islam. Maybe you could clarify this to me in class next week.
DeleteOn Grammar:
If you are interested in increasing your punctuation skills, consider using a colon (:) before a list of items. Take, for example, the list of women's responsibilities you mention above. After "responsibilities," you list three or four things that woman have to do. Add a colon after responsibilities and you will have more accurate punctuation and clearer expression of ideas.
--> "..... responsibilities: sitting at home, watching children, being pregnant, and so on."
One thing to keep in mind is that you can (usually) only add a colon after an INDEPENDENT CLAUSE.
Good luck!
If I was born again, I would like to be a woman because I am satisfied with what God created me. Also, I like to be a woman for some reasons. First of all, a woman is half of the society. It means she gives birth of half of the society because she represents the important role in the upbringing generation. She helps them to be able to work ,progress, and development forward. She also does all the responsibilities inside and outside the home to make generation in the preparation of cultured ,educated, and knowledgeable. Next, she leads the helm as the development of education because it begins from the house by the mother. In addition, a woman is an educator, creative, and multiple liabilities. She instills the values , principles, religion, morals, customs, and traditions inherited in the hearts of young in her rational to deal with others without exaggeration wisdom, and intelligence.
ReplyDeleteI don't know if you've read your classmates' comments above, but you are the only woman in the class who has said that she would remain a woman if given the chance to choose again. I like your point that women are "half" of society and a very important half at that. Your examples of the importance women have in preparing future generations is entirely accurate.
DeleteOn grammar:
You do a pretty good job of maintaining parallelism in your writing. However, there is one place where you have not used parallel structure. Look again at the sentence that starts with "In addition, a woman is an educator....." The three things in the list are not parallel. To fix this I would just add a noun to each item.
-->She is an educator, a creative PERSON, and the FAMILY MEMBER with...."
Hope this helps.
Actually, I didn't think that before. Now after a deep thinking, If I was born again, I would choose boy again. Because boy has more advantages. First, boys can play everywhere, parents mostly will accept that. Second, boy has more responsibility, boy need to work hard. It has more challenge in life. I like it! Third, boy can protect himself and others who belongs him. However, I think this question is not necessary,because we already being life in the world. Not only boys but also girls, work hard in weekdays and keep in touch with life, everyone will be the winner of life.
ReplyDeleteYou and Oyatullohki have both pointed out a number of advantages that men have because they are, well, men. Your claim that you "like" the fact that men have more challenges in life (life work) is quite unique. I also like and agree with your final comment.
DeleteOn grammar:
Here are three comments on adverb clauses in your writing.
1) Don't add a comma or a capital if the adverb clause comes at the end of the sentence (see the second sentence-->"...., If....")
2) Make sure each adverb clause is attached to an independent clause in every sentence. (see sentence 3--> "Because......." This is not a complete sentence!)
3)I think "If" is missing from your last sentence.
Hope this helps.